Friday, August 6, 2010

5 days-aditya bahl

Aditya walks down this awkward backstreet everyday
the tin roofs collaring vividly the designed windows
glisten with smears of red and yellow
that bounce off the sun's flaccid cheeks
somewhere behind the pruned
gray hallmarks,they call houses
the air jerks off
the pristine walkers
with its sultry overtones
managing to prick those who sit and watch

Some ordinary curtains married
to a wooden frame
blow towards the west that stares
at him from beyond the thoroughfare
As the wind is pushed through the alley
his head disappears behind the muffling curtains
he feels as if stabbed by a smile
running through
the air divided alleys
that sidle hi arms

the windows feel betrayed
and so do the people inside
Aditya remembers it was westwards
he had to go
he has been standing here for more than a minute now

the sun is about to go down on
the incumbent curtains
while the east is already groping with flashlights
This was the first moment in the last 5 days that he did not feel like crying....

5 comments:

  1. this is a masterpiece... so overwhelming... i read it twice... and enjoyed it a lot... you have captured his soul... and do i know him completely to say so? no! but this is his soul...

    he is a cloud... i have started to call him so... he travels in all directions... who knows where and when he will rain?


    and now i just think who are you who can understand and love a cloud so deeply...


    the wind?
    the sky?
    the sun?
    another cloud?
    or the mountain?
    or...
    :)


    that last line... just killed me!

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  2. well teacher aditya is a killer in every sense of the word...so something about him has to kill ...ahahaha..but the problem is he kills more of himself than anyone else...

    under your tutelage he might just learn..

    ps: and i included
    thank you ,

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  3. he really is!
    and what a great friend you are to see that 'problem'... just true friends tell us about these things...

    and who am i to teach him... or you... or anyone else? i just share... to learn more...


    love to you both, beautiful souls

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  4. i guess so...he's probably the reason i started writing again...i started writing in 4th standard..10 yrs old that would be....i don't have it right now or i would have presented my very first poem that i ever wrote....it feels funny and in some way innocent too

    as time catches on ...as it did with me...academics.the need to excel..pressures etc....that flame dwindled .....and when i started graduation it died...i hadn't written anything for three years until i met this piece of work.....so in a way he has resurrected some part of me...but that doesnt change the fact that he is a big pain in the ass...hahaah

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  5. I have long believed - To have a poem written for you always means you possess something a poem could be made out of.

    I felt unslightly honored when I read it. And I am unslightly late with a comment in here. Always has been/ will be good knowing you your poems photographs counts lives you live.

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